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While I sleep, my
fingers trace ocean
maps, aerial
on papier-mâché,
where tulips thrive
an alabaster winter
I disperse delicate
petals, exposing
colour’s spread,
filching the smooth
surfaces as I count
backward
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In mornight I see
her in an embroidered
rocking chair;
she hums, content,
busyness in her hands;
knit one, purl two
weaving rainbows,
hands of springtime,
a hint of clicks (echoing),
perfection’s bending
angle; rose polished
nails, she continues
harmonious,
her bones stitched
within my hands
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Sometimes, during
the evening, there’s
vagueness; redolent,
it represents soliloquy —
broken drafts, messages
swept into ether
as dusty moments
eclipse doors ‘neath
sunset’s symmetry
Placing a pen in hand,
my wrist curves toward
these fingers, drawing
salt from my skin



really cool textures in that last…love that act of writing drawing salt…smiles….and as dusty moments
eclipse doors ‘neath
sunset’s symmetry…is a great line….but the first is actually my fav…it is smooth as silk….smiles.
Thanks Brian, I think I like the first best myself.
What a fabulous weave. I love the ‘her bones stitched within my hands’ but.. It’s all so lovely though.
Bren *smiles*
There are so many layers in this piece and I loved discovering them as I read.
“perfection’s bending
angle; rose polished
nails,”
Beautiful!
Charlotte, thanks and you enjoy your Mardi Gras. Lucky girl!
Wonderful word choices and each one can stand alone but fit together so well, nicely done!
Thanks Pat Hatt. I got a chuckle out of your piece.
Brilliant imagery…too many that struck me to mention. Enjoyed this so much.
Victoria!!!! Hi, how are you? Thanks!
wow…really nice…the papier-mâché, the tulips, the knitting…love how you drew me into the poem…all the textures and def. atmospheric piece..
Thanks so much, Claudia.
A very powerful sense of serenity, peace, and the abiding of both the intellect and the feminine here, pamela. I enjoyed its complexity and its simplicity, mingling and spreading that fragrance only poetry has. (the tulips of course appeal to me most–only another month and maybe mine will be up.)
You have tulips, Joy? How perfectly wonderful. This climate does support their growth, but neither myself nor my husband have the know how for growing them.
Loved every image you drew here !
And the lines
“my wrist curves toward
these fingers, drawing
salt from my skin” .
oh that was so perfect ! Felt it ..
Thanks for visiting and commenting, lady.
Like a patchwork quilt that when finished brings all together beautifully. Very nice write!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/02/14/i-cant-do-this-anymore/
I enjoyed your poem too, Charles.
Thank you!
You weaved in the words most beautifully, Pam! I like the last stanza!
Hank
Thanks Hank.
A wonderful weave
great !
Thanks Ayala.
Hmm, lovely… that first passage especially was rapturous.
Rapturous, wow! Thanks Joseph.
Wow this is brilliant – it weaves together so seamlessly
How nice of you, Cynthia. I loved your poem as well.
The third stanza knits it together beautifully.
I was hoping for that effect, Irene.
indeed …niceley weaved…than ks for sharing Pam….and your comment on mine
While your poem was quite dark, Wayne. I liked it.