>Dismayed and waiting for sleep (the photo is by h. koppdelaney "Charon") RWP #116


In all his dismay

Gazing at the cloudy night sky

In need of a respite

Many thoughts going through his awareness

Darkness and solitude

As if inside an empty skull

The eyes have been taken out

No longer able to perceive

Weary from the long journey

Time seems at a halt

The clock is motionless

Waiting for the alchemist to arrive

Armies on the western front

In the land full of irritated and angry peasants

No food for them to eat

No shelter from the merciless elements

If only slumber would come for a little while

Allowing me to feel rested and revitalized

Come to me sleep, cover my eyes

As time goes back in motion


25 responses to “>Dismayed and waiting for sleep (the photo is by h. koppdelaney "Charon") RWP #116

  1. >I particularly was taken with your descriptions in the second stanza, Pamela. Dismayed and waiting for sleep is a familiar feeling!

  2. >Paul,Thanks for commenting and stopping by. I also need to start checking out some of the poems for this prompt. Pamela

  3. >Excellent – especially the ending. I've known that feeling often.

  4. >nicely done Pam…I felt it…..and Happy Birthday..(im late again)

  5. >Anthony,Thanks so much for stopping by and commenting. I too have experienced that feeling.Pamela

  6. >Wayne,Thanks and I am glad you could feel it. Thanks for stopping by. And thank you for the happy birthday, better late than never.Pamela

  7. >Oops. the url for my blog where my poem is posted is:http://poemblaze.wordpress.com/2010/02/27/rwp-116/

  8. >Love your writings Pamela! Always so thought provoking

  9. >Well said. Wonder why sleepless hours so rarely give us pleasant images

  10. >You've described in this poem to some degree what goes through my head at three in the morning sometimes: endless images, endless thoughts, and begging them to stop usually doesn't work. I call it monkey mind. And your poem suggests a cross of monkey mind and nightmare. Well done.-Nicole

  11. >Poemblaze,Thanks so much for stopping by and commenting. I now have to get around to reading everyone else's work for this prompt. It ahs been a busy week.Pamela

  12. >Lori,Thanks for the lovely comment! And thanks for stopping by.Pamela

  13. >Barbars, Thanks for commenting. I also have wondered why can't we think of pleasant things during those sleepless nights. But it is always the unpleasant things that have taken place at sometime or another.Pamela

  14. >Nicole,Thank you so much! Monkey mind now that is an interesting concept. I hate my insomnia and it is impossible to make the bad thoughts go away when I experience it.Pamela

  15. >Excellent imagery! It surprises me, always, that the dark isn't an easier place to be – since one can't see fearsome things that wander, even in the light. Really enjoyed this.

  16. >Susan,Thanks so much for stopping by and commenting. I am so glad that you enjoyed it! I too loved yours!Pamela

  17. >Very nicely done. Outstanding imagery. As with all your work, Pamela, it leaves one slighty disturbed.

  18. >Thanks for stopping by and commenting.Pamela

  19. >The second stanza really stands out for me. It's just a very physical way of understanding this moment. Nicely done.

  20. >I really love the second stanza…I can see that clock…motionless. Nice take on this.

  21. >Cristina,Thank you for commenting. And thanks for the compliment. There are many thoughts that come to mind from this photo.Pamela

  22. >Jone,Thanks for commenting. The clock does seem motionless in this photo. I am glad you like it.Pamela

  23. >Hi Pamela! I just love how you opened with "In all his dismayGazing at the cloudy night skyIn need of a respite " Great imagery throughout. Kudos!-Alejandra (redpetals04.wordpress.com)

  24. >Alejandra,Thanks for the compliment. Thank you for stopping by.Pamela

I appreciate all comments.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )


Connecting to %s