>Where you lay POW


Locks that broke my heart

I wish that I was there

Birds in the somber sky

I remember when I could fly

Above these blood-drenched walls

I met you in a dream

There was candy and you held an ice-cream cone

Which melted on your cheek

A distant voice, a murmur

Escapes your lifeless lips

A bottled coke, a whiskey glass

A fetish in the dirt

I wrote words upon my sleeves

Any part of clothing available to me

You sat and stared as if mesmerized

I longed for days like before

When locks broke my heart …


14 responses to “>Where you lay POW

  1. >hi, Pamela!I love what you did with this one!wow — "I wrote words upon my sleeves / Any part of clothing available to me…" — what a beautiful image.(I hope I can keep up with the visiting a little better now that school is winding down to summer. Thank you so much for all your kind words on my poems during the napowrimo — one of these days I'm going to sit down and catch up!!)

  2. >I longed for days like before..a very poignant phrase and very pertinent to a conversation I was just having.People I know have been corrupted and made miserable by financial success.When they were young and had nothing they were much nicer.

  3. >Angie,Thanks for the comment. It's nice to see you over at Rall's place.Pamela

  4. >Rall,Boy isn't that the truth and they are sometimes much worse in Mexico. Thanks for the nice comment.Pamela

  5. >Yeah, I love the images you have created too! The bit about the dream, speaks to my heart!Nicely!!

  6. >Andy,Thanks for that and I enjoyed yours as well.Pamela

  7. >Pamela – nice new neighborhood, right? Appreciate that you captured a sense of longing for the past without being too explicit; these dream like images allow us readers to construct some of our own images and meanings.[Also, if you have a chance to pick up Sandra's "House on Mango Street" it's becoming a classic on the Latina experience in the urban U.S. Happy reading!

  8. >JDM,Thanks for that and it is nice to see you.I will check out her book.Pamela

  9. >Nice, Pamela. I particular like the line about writing words on your sleeves.

  10. >Thanks Paul. We missed you during napowrimo. I am glad you liked it.Pamela

  11. >Sad and powerful words, Pamela. Well done!

  12. >Marianne,Thank you. I am glad you liked it.Pamela

  13. >Hi Pamela, this left me with a very powerful sense of loss. I love what you did with the prompt.

  14. >Francis buddy thanks and nice to see you.Pamela

I appreciate all comments.

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