>As I fall we write poems #17

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Flowered smiles that flee in turbulent times
Sadness flows with definite ease
Superstition not something I adhere to
Karma is part of life but it’s always in perspective
Am I so off-balance just like the stilts
I use to walk high above the crowded lanes
rough and righteous lined with sharp rocks
Tomorrow is another day then I can file my feelings away
Only to fling false pride in the furthest direction

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14 responses to “>As I fall we write poems #17

  1. >Wow your lines flow Pamela. I do so agree about false pride.

  2. >I agree with Irene, this flows. Especially like the reference to stilts as a means of looking down on others, and the difficulty of using that to move amongst sharp rocks. Really like this, Pamela,Elizabeth

  3. >Pamela, there is so much feeling expressed in this poem. I agree with the statement about karma!

  4. >I know this is true for someone close.pitching forward

  5. >You have some great sound images in this one, Pam.Love the line: rough and righteous lined with sharp rocks(and I like the ?unintentional? Poem title: as I fall we write poems)

  6. >Pamela, this poem has a lot of depth. Well written!

  7. >OH, I liked this one! Yes, Karma & other, unknown things.Nice picture, too (hope I can select the right profile)

  8. >This is probably one of my favorite ones of yours I've read so far. As I read it, I sounded it out in my mind and I could hear the alliteration, which gives it a lovely sound. Also, I liked your image of you on stilts. This does have a lot of depth to it, and especially in such a short poem. Well done.-Nicole

  9. >First of all, I just love the image in your header. I get this…"Tomorrow is another day and then I can file my feelings away"Sometimes it's easier to file them and not deal.

  10. >Oh, good poem! Love the thought of you walking on stilts above all the hubbub…………cool poem!

  11. >Thanks everyone for all the nice comments.Pamela

  12. >your words are magical,I feel it,lovely done!

  13. >Thanks so much JingleHappy weekend!

  14. >http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/poetry-potluck-big-bang.htmlwelcome to poetry pot luck party,simply link in 1 to 3 poems, we will comment for you.Happy Monday!Make sure to sign in and follow our blog to stay fine tuned about our updates…we represent poet of the week, poetry blog of the week, poem of the week, if you play along, there is a chance that your work is represented and your talent is exposed to wider audience.

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