Her alluring lotus eyes tell enchanting stories:
a kinship of women with beautiful torsos
suffocating you in sleep with a
wish as inspiring as
strange, devious voices carried
on the bold winds
The words don't fit. They rarely do.
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This is wonderfu, Pamelal. Lotus eyes is brilliant. I love the imagery, and sound the wind carrying voices brings.
Thanks Brenda. This was a second draft, the first was about the flower itself. I wasn’t happy with it. I changed the premise completely. Love those wordles 🙂
Your new blog is spectacular, Pamela. And I love the poem. “Alluring lotus eyes” is perfect. “Devious voices carried
on the bold winds” is splendid!
Thanks, Marianne. Nice to see you made your way over here.
Small but spectacular, Pamela.
Small, it is Irene. Thanks so much!
i like picturing lotus eyes telling enchanting stories. I can’t decide if this represents good or evil, but the ending of the poem leads me to believe it is evil!
Evil is what I had in mind, well what I mean is that, some woman are that way, Mary. Thanks.
I know exactly what you mean… love it!
Oh, I love how you used “lotus”!! Those eyes…they can be spell binding!
Here’s mine: Inspiring Dreams.
~Paula
(OH…and YAY for hypertexting your post on the wordle site!!) 😉
It does happen, Laurie. Thanks.
Just seemed to fit, Paula. After a second pass, that is. Thanks for the link site, it sure did simplify things.
Very evocative! The first line itself paints a vivid picture. Nicely done. 🙂
Hi Susannah, nice to see you back! Thanks.
Joining the chorus, love the lotus eyes. But, also the devious voices. Once again, I got caught up in your flow and imagery and was shocked that it ended so soon. I love how each of us takes these same words and then makes them our own. Here’s to a multitude of voices, devious or not, may they always sing!
Elizabeth
Beware of the devious voices, Elizabeth 🙂 Thanks so much.
Vivid and slightly scary poem, Pamela. Great use of the wordle for a good “careful what you wish for” cautionary tale. 🙂
Yes, Traci. Good advice, indeed. Thanks.
Excellent use of the wordle, Pamela.
Thanks Tilly 🙂
Compact but very evocative. I really like “alluring lotus eyes”.
Francis, I believe many people do 🙂
I like your new blog and that poem is wonderful.
Thanks Madeleine.
She of the devious eyes is shockingly vivid with so few words. Well done.
margo
Thanks Margo. I didn’t feel the need to continue further. I felt it made my point.
Pamela, so concise but so evocative. It recalled the Odyssey for me, those alluring women and and bold winds, keeping Odysseus from home.
Richard
Love the Odyssey, Richard. I hadn’t thought of that, but I suppose your right. I just didn’t want to write about the flower itself. I went in a different direction.
I didn’t think it was possible to use every word in the Wordle to make a coherent poem, so I didn’t even try–but you did it! I’m impressed!
Thanks mmt. I love wordles, and am usually up for the challenge 🙂
I am amazed by those who can use the words of a wordle in a short, concise, meaningful and understandable poem. Such skill. Well done.
Thanks Mike, I love wordles. Sometimes they call to be short.