“Hurry in the Magic” The Sunday Whirl #35

A haphazard seaside citizen
believes in luck, holding trouble in the lag,
a pittance game of winning hands;
he lines them up in quick succession
on old oak, as bottles clink,
revealing a favourite, purple card

He flicks “denotes royalty” —
a telling voice never flies
erroneous, stated
in dreamscape recoil

Each year he hikes
on brambling brush, a happening
of mysticism on earth

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14 responses to ““Hurry in the Magic” The Sunday Whirl #35

  1. You made a proper job of it.

  2. Pam,
    You did very well in getting all the words in a nice flow. Wordles put a lot of discipline in its creation unlike free verse. Great verse!

    Hank

  3. Interesting word portrait and great use of the wordle, Pamela. 🙂

  4. Nicely done, Pamela! I especially liked: “holding trouble in the lag,” and “a pittance game.”

    Wishing you a lovely Christmas in your corner of the world!

  5. Well done, Pamela. Mystical, mysterious, memorable!

  6. I like this 🙂 I just had the same thoughts about mystics and magi and turned mine into the Magi. Very nice, sleepless write from you!

  7. I love the image evoked by your phrase: ‘haphazard seaside citizen’.

    margo

  8. I love his line connecting purple to royalty…it’s sad, but a bit funny as well. The piece leaves me wondering, and somehow there’s hope in there.

  9. I enjoyed the mystery in this–and isn’t magic always a sort of mystery? Good use of the wordle words in a creative landscape.

  10. I love the ending and enjoyed what you did with the words Pamela. 🙂

  11. A nice portrait of some magic maker.

  12. Thank you all for the lovely comments.
    Feliz Navidad!

I appreciate all comments.

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