“Fade to Shadow” Reverie #1: Joseph Harker; Naming Constellations

I stare into the lens, reflecting a younger me,
drawing figures, white hotness in snow.
She harvests angels and castles
— prismatic statues to tribute north’s
winter, while reaching for sterile branches
above. She can’t see me, as the moon
rounds its cloud ledge. Snowflakes seek
the air; she looks at their patterns —
my life, this moment, this now.

I watch her draw snow into forms of today,
perfect shapes for tomorrow’s past.
Pop-satin signature, now twisted blue.
And as I sit on the desert floor,
a butterscotch sorceress bites
my shoulders — cacti spines, hostile on palms.

Process notes: I used a form idea from Diane Lockward’s January poetry newsletter. If, you don’t know about her newsletter, you should sign up. (good info) here’s the link:

http://www.dianelockward.com

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25 responses to ““Fade to Shadow” Reverie #1: Joseph Harker; Naming Constellations

  1. Glad to find another Lockward enthusiast – she’s amazing! Neat poem – I like the “butterscotch sorceress” here, biter that she be …

  2. great phrase: tomorrow’s past.

  3. . I especially liked ‘butterscotch sorceress.” Joseph’s prompt fits the style of writing you do very well.

  4. loving the lines in this “I watch her draw snow into forms of today,” – and what images you create in the first stanza too! enjoyed reading this! nice work!

  5. I love the contradictions here, ‘hotness in the snow’ for one.
    A very lovely write.

  6. This is just really good, pamela–you paint that old self as we come to see it, a familiar stranger, perhaps someone we saw every day but never spoke to–then make her world real but remote, and bite into the present with that excellent concluding image. Thanks for the newsletter info. (The art pic is fantastic too.)

  7. You have a style that is bold and intriguing…I love it! You have a new fan, I am following! If you like prompts, maybe you will consider my Free Write Friday’s? You can find it in the menu on my blog 🙂 Hope to see you around! 🙂

    http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2012/01/10/nightlights/

  8. Drawing snow was a great line, I would rather have it literally drawn and never fall too, but that’s just me, nice verse!

  9. Don’t sell yourself short, this is enchanting. Doubly impressive that were you able to meld the prompt with a form challenge… and I’ll echo everyone else, I enjoyed the butterscotch sorceress. 🙂

  10. Pamela- This is beyond beautiful.

  11. I watch her draw snow into forms of today,
    perfect shapes for tomorrow’s past.

    love the twist in those lines…and the contrasts through out…watching someone in the snow and ending up in the desert…the bite of the cacti is felt…

  12. Oh wow, this part is amazing:

    “a butterscotch sorceress bites
    my shoulders — cacti spines hostile on palms”

    http://rosemarymint.wordpress.com/2012/01/09/crux-matter/

  13. love the contrasts and imagery..the hotness in snow..
    She harvests angels and castles
    — prismatic statues to tribute north’s
    winter, while reaching for sterile branches
    above… this is awesome..

  14. The white hotness in snow grabbed me, Pamela. Everything …. this is great. I love reading it after trying the prompt myself. It helps me sort it, and it is fun to un-puzzle (if that makes sense). This is excellent, thank you.

  15. Thanks Brenda. I did enjoy writing this, a bit of a tug on the writing muscles, which is good.

  16. I enjoyed this ! As if I was looking over your younger self’s shoulder ..

I appreciate all comments.

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