“Infringed Repetition of The Last Song” dVerse Open Link #79

Crystals hung
over autographs
in hope forlorn
she will live perhaps
as salted wounds
expire

in letting him in
the wind changed forefront
in false
remembrance
sacrament torrid
shambles belated
nay sacrosanct

found nosegayed redemption in supple transition
she trembled unanguished in under repose
while he lay in some sort of bedlam reclined
lost there within
transpired through time
or enveloped afterward, sought herewith-all,
undermined simply by simple night fall

further transgressions would surely not stand
to this dancer of dancers beloved in these woods
fluttered or not, he would read once a while
on this hilltop bequeathed in a similar style
for she danced as she did and he twirled in her hair
and they lay thereabouts in amused unaware

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12 responses to ““Infringed Repetition of The Last Song” dVerse Open Link #79

  1. Wow, the last two stanzas really dance this poem to special place !! excellent !

  2. for she danced as she did and he twirled in her hair
    and they lay thereabouts in amused unaware…so musical..really great rhythm in this and some tight images..the salted wounds expiring…

  3. mmm…love that last stanza pamela…i have an affinity for dancers…i married one…smiles…laying under her hair as well….really nicely done…esp toward the end for me…smiles.

  4. I love the lavish, intricate, serious-playful intertwining of words, symbols, images, and above all sounds in the last two stanzas, set in contrast to the clean order and simplicity of the first two–the fourth and fifth really feel mythic, bardic if you will, to me–loved them all, totally.

  5. Like Brian, Pamela, I enjoyed the last stanza and the picture my mind conjured of the dancer and the love she shared with the one who twirled her hair!

  6. The last stanza rocked my socks, I can see her there all breathless and anticipating a touch of something…maybe my vivid imagination at this time of night haha xx

  7. I enjoyed visualizing this dance. Reads wonderfully. 🙂

  8. Yes – the last stanza is particularly vivid and musical but your use of language is interesting throughout. Thanks.k.

  9. Love the last stanza, great poem.

  10. “As salted wounds expire…” Amazing strong tone here.

  11. Dancing and playfully with someone close enough to do hair twirling. Isn’t it wonderful! Nicely Pam!

    Hank

  12. some real romance in these final lines Pamela:
    for she danced as she did and he twirled in her hair
    and they lay thereabouts in amused unaware

    finishing with a flourish 🙂

    and the opening really sparks something into life . . .

    Crystals hung
    over autographs

    you have some awesome titles too

    cheers Pamela 🙂

I appreciate all comments.

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