“Closing Around Tears” dVerse Open Link #98

In an anchored dream
I remember her laugh,
a child dancing in the rain.

I listen to silent shifts
connecting the morning,
living in life’s fertile layers
on a continuous current.

The heart closes around tears
when nothingness is forever,
swinging from a beam,
solid as a lasting phrase,
a yield to laughter or
swept forgotten kiss.

Where a child is left
alone dancing in the rain,
so much silence comes from laughter
because water’s everywhere,
waiting delicately to drown the day.

Process notes:
Some of the words came from “The Sunday Whirl”, which I never finished and kept editing. It simply never felt quite right to me.

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27 responses to ““Closing Around Tears” dVerse Open Link #98

  1. “the heart closes around tears”
    so much in this line…
    brilliant!

  2. That last stanza was so beautiful,, and a sadness in those memories…

  3. concluding lines made me teary..what a heartfelt bittersweet verse..

  4. Sombre. But thought provoking. Like the recurring theme.

  5. Your words so sweet, they’re ringing that bell &
    I heard the rain a laughin’ as the droplets fell.

  6. The past is everywhere
    lurking right around the next corner
    grinning lewdly from sewer grates
    make it go away
    and let me stride undaunted
    into a bright new day

  7. Deep and lovely piece.

  8. Where a child is left
    alone dancing in the rain,
    so much silence comes from laughter
    because water’s everywhere,
    waiting delicately to drown the day.

    There is such quiet inttensiy here–always such a pleasure to read our work

  9. Solid as a lasting phrase–great image! Beautifully melancholy, very nicely done.

  10. some really great lines pamela…the heart closing around tears…in the second stanza…and i agree…that last one…it made me smile at the dancing girl in the midst of so much water that could drown the day if we let it…

  11. So heartbreaking to think of a child dancing alone in the rain, Pamela……and wanting to drown the day. Very sad indeed.

  12. Poignant ~ I specially like the ending lines:

    because water’s everywhere,
    waiting delicately to drown the day.

  13. Another good example of your ability to recreate a small scene and your ability to take us with you where you go. I enjoyed this word-painting so much, Pamela.

  14. That was strong and sad, the connection of water is strong…thank you

  15. Just love it and that last line just ends the poem perfectly.

  16. I know that child. Today she is okay. Sadness doesn’t have to last.

  17. I listen to silent shifts
    connecting the morning,
    living in life’s fertile layers
    on a continuous current.

    One would just let the slow force of life’s experience slide slowly pulling us along with it. One often feels down over things on some days! Nicely crafted Pamelita!

    Hank

  18. The third stanza really wrapped my heart..well woven message

  19. There is always such a delicate touch to your poems, Pamela, and this is certainly no exception. For a while, I thought I had to fit all the words in somehow, then realized (once again) that a prompt is only a suggestion and there are no hard and fast rules, unless we make them. Love what you have accomplished here, setting a scene then helping us really ‘see’ and ‘feel’ it.

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/

  20. This is beautiful and sad, deep and rich and definitely rewards being read several times. Thanks for sharing,Pamela.

  21. “so much silence comes from laughter”… I loved that line. I loved all the imagery tucked inside this poem. It is so layered and beautiful.

  22. ‘Bittersweet’ seems the perfect word. A powerfully touching write Pamela.

  23. Beautiful in every way as the words do connect much more than you might feel they do.

  24. The heart closes around tears
    when nothingness is forever,

    This is such a powerful line…

  25. hey Pamela

    your wonderful titles always strike me deep and set up the Po so well.
    in the closing this piece became distinct and memorable by the bookends 🙂

  26. Bittersweet and a touching poem!

  27. Thanks all for the nice comments on this bittersweet moment I was having.

I appreciate all comments.

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