“Sun Tracks” The Sunday Whirl #114

Early summer lies in wake
who said this would be perfect
unbroken chance in neighbourhoods
on green cultivated complex

soaked in wetness fen, blooming
sunflowers, sturdy stems reveal
unpale yellow answers held within,
no excuse, no mess, simply life
coming forth enthroned.

Along the edges of an open
door, a breeze stills me in coolness
flaired, I file it for times when
the sun burns forested thorns

isolated and tossed back
on the asphalt tracks gone.

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19 responses to ““Sun Tracks” The Sunday Whirl #114

  1. Nice imagery of a sanctuary sought during the hot days in summer!! Looks like it is early days still on a cool June morning!!

  2. I can see it in full HD… Gonna file that image too…!

  3. If only we could file away those moments for times when needed!

  4. Beautiful images, as always! Especially love:
    ” sturdy stems reveal
    unpale yellow answers held within.”

  5. I enjoryed reading this piece! ….in summer, especially, a breeze stills me in coolness!

  6. Along the edges of an open
    door, a breeze stills me in coolness

    … I just love this!!

  7. We should all have a filing cabinet of memories to cool the heat and quench the thirst in life. Great thoughts here.

  8. Filing the coolness for later, nice image and idea. The phrasing of your final couplet is fantastic. Love it.

  9. Lovely flow and vivid imagery as usual, my friend. I like the ending a lot,

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/06/23/lost/

  10. I love the idea of filing the cool breeze for another time. I like to think I can ‘front-load’ the green of summer to call it back in the brown of winter! Especially enjoyed the final lines!Wherein The Muse’s Vehicle Goes Into the Shop For Repairs

  11. Lovely moment you shared with us. I also like the idea of storing those breezes and we sure have plenty of the right now.

  12. “no excuse, no mess, simply life
    coming forth enthroned..”

    I really like that Pamela–says it all for me. It’s amazing how our brains can absorb and store the intangible, and even more so how well you bring it to life here.

  13. Lovely evocation of a summer morning, (wish we could file things like breezes for later)

  14. After a hot day, those breezes are a blessing, a reminder that we’re still alive. Lovely poem.

  15. simply life
    coming forth enthroned. …dfe the cool line in this poem…also for when life burns thorns for sure…and the thrown back on the asphalt at the end…great touch….sorry i missed you yesterday somehow…smiles.

  16. This is beautiful. I especially love:
    “unpale yellow answers held within”

  17. There’s a certain coolness to counter the hot summer days! Would be fun to get to such a place. Brilliant take Pamelita!

    Hank

  18. Excellent piece,

    soaked in wetness fen, blooming
    sunflowers, sturdy stems reveal
    unpale yellow answers held within,
    no excuse, no mess, simply life
    coming forth enthroned.

    perfect

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